I enjoyed reading this one. I doubt I will read the rest of the series however. Most (but not all) of what follows is negative nitpicking, but if you want to hear everything wrong I found in a pretty good book, keep reading.
The story was interesting and was definitely an interesting take on the world of Oz. I mean, my experience with Oz is watching the movie a few times over the years, the last time probably 5+ years ago, and seeing the Wicked musical a couple of times, so I have very little to compare to, but I found it interesting nonetheless. I can’t really fault the story itself much, but honestly, I just didn’t get that into it, I can’t really put my finger on why. I think I just felt sorta swept along, like Amy wasn’t really that engaged in the whole thing, it felt sorta detached. And in some places it moved slow, in others it was really fast, in a way that pulled me out of it a bit. A way I described it when I was about a fifth of the way through the book (before I got to some of the stuff that went really fast, like her training) was “the writing seems to take a sudden turn sometimes, where I feel jarred. I feel it has moved really fast while also moving quite slow. Not a ton has happened of import I feel like, but so much has happened.” And I stand by that. The first part of the story felt like it was jamming so much in, trying to rush us through the world to show us as much of it as she could before actually getting to the story. None of it felt info-dump-y as it was all done through narrative, but the narrative did very little for the plot. I mean, we met a character that seemed like they would be important, then the character was unceremoniously killed off pretty quick, with barely a mention the rest of the book. Don’t get me wrong, I’m all for killing characters (and the darkness and gore and violence in this book was surprising and awesome) but it really, again, just felt like it had no point. And the author just kinda herded us from one this to the next without time to absorb any of the things that felt like they had no real point to them. She painted a very intriguing picture. That we saw nothing of the rest of the book.
I also didn’t really like the romance. The book being a YA, the whole thing was a given, but I think she could have handled it better. It feels like it was just thrown in almost as an afterthought. It had little effect on the story and happened quick and predictably. I don’t know how it progresses through the series, but so far it feels forced and inconsequential.
There were some instances, too, where I felt pulled out of the world ((hang with me, I’ll get to some of the good things)) because of something that happened or was said. One that stuck out was “Oz History 101” was used as a joke I believe. And that felt out of place. This fantasy world exists alongside ours and has people from our world in it, yes, but the use of how we name classes (correct me if I’m wrong on the origin of that cliché joke) still felt out of place.
I do like the grayness of the story. The question about what is Wicked, what is Good. The main character doing some “bad” things. The bad guys seem totally evil, but the good guys aren’t your classic heroes. And you can’t be sure of anyone’s motivations, or, sometimes, even what side they’re on. Add onto that how brutal and violent it is and you’ve got exactly the kind of thing I like. And the magic was really interesting. How it worked, what it was. I enjoyed reading about it.
I’m going to get into some specifics now. Spoilers (and nitpicking) ahead.
One thing that had me really confused was the plan. It seemed to me that they sent Amy to the city to figure out how to get close to Dorothy and kill her, but then Nox said they had a plan already. They definitely should have told her a bit more, given her a clearer vision of what her role was. Because I had no clue. I imagine this is answered, at least in part, later, but I don’t know why they needed her at all. If Jellia was there, with close access to Dorothy, and they were able to sneak into the ball and eliminate magic, why not just do that and have Jellia slit her throat?
There were issues with the writing itself too. For the most part it was fine, but I kept record of many of the issues. This is where the nitpicking comes into play. Read if you want. Otherwise, just know that I enjoyed reading it, but the other books in the series will not move to the top of my reading list.
A couple of times the writing contradicts itself from one sentence to the next, like the author was trying to make a contrast, but to me it just came off as a mistake
Star ran off but she knew it would be back. The next time the rat is mentioned, it was somewhere on her person again and squealing.
“…and he shut right up. She cut him off…” she isn’t cutting him off anymore if he already shut up. pg. 88
She describes the Scarecrow pretty much how I envisioned him and in a way that is perfectly clear who he is. Then she says he is twisted and warped into something she hardly recognizes. Which is it? This description that is obviously him or “something I hardly recognized?”
She fell asleep, woke up, tried to find the door, fell asleep again, woke up and then “after all the hours locked away in here, al alone, it really did help just to have him sitting next to me.” Felt way too quick. If we were supposed to feel like she was trapped for so long it was good to have another person, it should have been drawn out longer. I got no sense that she was in there for a super long time. Pg. 101
She goes on this big heart-felt thing about how she never liked the rat, but now it had been her companion and she wanted to protect it. I feel it was a little undeserved. I never got much emotion from her on the rat, good or bad. Pg.107
She could feel the cold of the knife in her hand. Last we heard about the knife it had come clattering out of her hand. Pg.117
“What had I gotten myself into” used twice in 3 paragraphs. To me, twice feels redundant. 3 or more feels like intentional repetitiveness. but twice on the some page, then no again, comes off as poor writing. Pg117
She is specifically identifying stone as opal, she is saying she hit him in the solar plexus. This feel forced. I doubt very many high school girls would both see a rock and go “I think that’s opal” and hit a guy and say it was his solar plexus. We have no reason to think she would know about either of those things. She hasn’t identified any rocks before Pg 144 & 149
I call BS on her kicking him in the stomach and making him stumble and surprising him. A kick, especially one hard enough to make a guy stumble that wasn’t even affected by her hardest punch, would not surprise the trained fighter. Kicks take time and hard kicks have obvious warning signs. He should have seen it coming a mile off Pg. 149
Glamora explaining she and Glinda were connected, now they don’t seem to be. Then says there’s a chance killing her would kill Glinda too. Which brings up 2 questions: 1) if you aren’t connected anymore, then it wouldn’t, right? I think it is poor order of dialogue. 2) If that would kill Glinda and you are happy to make that sacrifice, why not commit suicide? Maybe she’s not sure. Pg 174
“I couldn’t help Nox, and Nox couldn’t help me” then half a page later he helps her and they have a short conversation without any indication that the fighting had let up Pg 233
“And then we were surrounded” then, farther down on the same page “we were surrounded” Pg 233
She’s using her knife, then later on the page it says she pulls it out. Theoretically I can make an explanation for that (she dropped it and it vanished, then she retrieved it again), but it doesn’t say it in the page and we aren’t told anywhere if it disappears when dropped so… Pg 233
How did Astrid’s absence go unnoticed?
Dorothy looked at Amy with a Permasmile, then, a couple of paragraphs later, frowns. I was under the impression one couldn’t frown with Permasmile. Pg 315
The whole thing with her getting into the Scarecrow’s lab felt real easy and convenient. She found it no problem. Started the fire no problem. That worked. She got to the greenhouse no problem. The crows did nothing until it was too late. All too easy.
She describes Pete in a way that clearly shows he looks better than usual. Then says “he looked better than normal” explicitly. Feel redundant Pg 385
Wait… so, she is just wearing a different face? How did people not recognize that her voice was different? Pg 402
Pretty sure up to this point just the movie had been mentioned, but suddenly she’d read about this her whole life? Pg 430